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2 Comments on "මැරී වැටෙන නිළියක්"

  1. Stranger
    14/10/2011 at 2:04 am Permalink

    Looks like the author is telling a story that only she understands. Apart from the strangeness and the faint understanding, a reader can feel, it would be a hard exercise gather any idea of what this is about. Saying that, it could be just me feeling that way :).

    PS: It’s evident that the author has a good ability and creativeness for writing, however, I feel that she is writting for herself rather than for the reader. This is something common for even the greatest writers in thier early stages of writing. It’s not really a bad thing, however, until the author reaches to a some sort of level of maturity, it will be hard for the readers to really “read” her.

    It might be worth remembering that greatest literature are always when the complex human mind and relationships are expressed and explained in such ways that they feel simple (understandable) but carries the weight of the complexity it’s related to.

    I wish you good luck for your future work!!!

  2. stranger,

    you were right,i write for my self.it’s kind of a wired thing i guess.but i’m enjoying writing to me.i just want to entertain myself.
    may be it’s my fault.i always hide the story.readers may not understand what i’m gonna really say.i figure it every time.
    but i can’t get rid of it.but i’ll try my best.
    anyway thank’s for getting me.i really appreciate your comment.
    thank you.

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